It feels so hopeless the way he loves her, knowing she'll never feel the same way about him.

Such a sad tone, but very well written.

Thanks for comment.
Obviously my "hint" was too vague... and your words make me cringe even more...

But on the other hand your interpretation is fine, if you consider it a Lee/Kara story. It could be, after all.

it's really go well with what you know now about lee's childhood.

I was thinking a little like except without the innuendos between lee and his mother.

very well done and credible.

Thanks for encouragement. I really wasn't sure how this approach would be taken, so your oppinion eases my mind a bit :)

i likes. =)

Thanks :*

The first time I read this, I didn't completely get who the woman was until I read the last line, and had to go back and read it again.

I do find this subject disturbing, but you've written it very well and very emotionally. I can really feel Lee's desperate need for love and affection from her, of whatever kind, and how that overcomes his knowledge that it's wrong. You really made my heart ache for him here, he's so confused and sad and alone, and I can see how this emotional neglect and abuse might lead into how emotionally needy and messed-up he is as an adult.

I don't like this idea, but you've made me understand how it could happen, and that's very good writing.

Don't delete this, as you wrote you might in your ffnet alert. It's a darker story, but sometimes these dark ideas come out and have to be written. You've put enough warning in your header to warn off anyone who might be offended.

I don't like this idea

I don't like it either, and that's probably why I was feeling so uneasy about it. I was quite surprised I wrote it, I must admit – it took me less than an hour, and in not exactly sober state of mind (guess that's when subconscious troubles come to the surface a little easier). The hangover came the next day ;), and I had trouble dealing with it.

I really needed some honest opinion and... well... I trusted I could get it from you :). So, thanks a lot for coming out and saying what you said. I owe you.

No problem. I hope what I said was helpful and/or reassuring.

Well done. I knew who it was right off, and was my heart thumping all the way. But then I have first-hand experience. Thing is, it's not Lee's fault; it's entirely his mother's. The child is never in charge, even when he's older, the situation's too well-established and out of his control. The adult, particularly the parent, has all the power, physical and emotional.

The child is never in charge, (...) The adult, particularly the parent, has all the power, physical and emotional.

God, I hope this story doesn't allow any other interpretation!

But thing is, kids are usually not aware of that fact, they take the blame on themselves. They need someone else to tell them it's not their fault. At least that's what psychologists are saying.

Thanks for your comment. It means a lot to me.

So true. I think a careful reading makes it pretty clear who the woman is. I read the story twice again and liked it more with each reading. You expressed Lee's emotions so right on, the back and forth, the wanting and not wanting, that inner conflict. My heart was so thumping, my breathing was so tight, I think I was flushed, that's how right on you were. Even now, thinking about it, it all comes back. I think it's one of the best things you've written. How do you know so much? I want to read it to my husband tonight. He works with a group of boys who have been through similar situations, not necessarily their mothers, but with adults.

Well done! You tell the story with tact. But
this does not blunt the impact one bit.
I really enjoyed the 'inner' look at a
possible history for Lee. This is plausible and skillfully done.

Suenix

Thanks a lot for your opinion, especially the part about "tact". I was (and still am) a little afraid if i didn't go too far. Glad you find it plausible.